@JohnA said:
. If I think there's a huge difference I'll post another link.
best,
John
Don't worry John. I still like the compostition. [[:)]] You've widened it, haven't you? The opening is Herrmannesque and threatening, Agreed? It's driving forward, right? Why do you allow it to fall away at around 1' 18" then? Mix wise, I would like to suggest that you get the instruments that you wish to accent during the phrases and orchestration up to this point, much more to the fore. More 'in your face'.
From there, to about 1' 42" you either need to do something about the strings sound, or orchestrate the strings so they are much fuller. They're weak still, although better than before.
As a favour to me, make the gong sound at 2' 13" not louder, but deeper and more sustained. [:D]
At 2' 32" the vibes or mallets (?) should be mixed up right to the fore again. Nice phrasing and notation, SO LETS HEAR IT! [[:)]]
It's a pity for me that you can't get back to the Herrmann type string figures at the end of the piece. No worries.
This is a dark piece that I am really beginning to grow fond of. Make it darker, louder and Gothic. And more reverb where it counts. You've got Space Designer after all.
All the best
Paul