hi there,
I´m just 5 minutes in this forum, just locking and just waiting for my Pro Edition, so I don´t know what is exactly possible, I just can hear the demos and dream about it... ;o) (give me one week and I´ll be back...*smile*)...
ok, so the first I heard was something I didn´t hear: A Room... !!! Think about it: more instruments, more room... it´s perhaps a little bit too simple, beacause I know that it could be very interresting to hear a symphonic Orchestra (like a Wagner Orchestra...) in a 20qm room, but this is normally not our personel history of hearing music... ( so we normally hear french horns with a long reverb, far away a.s.o.)
2nd thing is: I miss a little bit the full Orchestra-sound. I think you wanted to make it big, bigger... but I cannot hear it... it´s just a little bit... normally we make in this point the mistake to double the voices and to add other instruments playing the same...
remember waht Arnold Schoenberg said: What we can say with one voice, we should say with one oce...
ok, this is one point you did, you made it with the voices you wanted to hear... but it sounds not so fat I would expect (in the way of the art of the piece...)
so perhaps you should think about making it a little bit deeper, more fat... and it´s no question of EQ I think... perhaps you had to use more instruments...for example a little bit woodwind in addition to the strings...( in contrast of what Schoenberg said, but in YOUR case, it would be nessesary perhaps?)
last point: you are using in the beginning horns with a crescendo... I think you would like to here that they are on the point there and then they make their swell..(sorry for my english!)... I miss this playing "at the point"...like: Taaaa....TaTaTaTaaaa....TaTaTaTaTaTaaa.... ! It must be there! But in your case you think it, but the longer notes make a crescendo, so it´s not on the point, it comes...later...(DahaaaAAAA...DahahahaaaaAAAA)! Perhaps you should think about a Subito-piano or a Forte-piano with an additional crescendo... but don´t do this too much it could be too much...so not every time...but perhaps better then now... because you hear this accent you want to have (I think you want to have it?)
at least: nice piece, keep on working....!!! Everyone who makes music makes the world a little bit better... ;o)
take care,
Acker